Statement on Buddhist Vegetarianism

A Buddhist organisation asked me to help write two short ‘politically correct’ statements on vegetarianism for a national documentary. This is what I came up with:

‘Where available and dependent on various conditions,
lifelong or occasional vegetarianism is an optional but commonly encouraged practice
for lay and monastic Buddhists to practise universal compassion.
This is so as excess meat consumption is damaging to animal welfare, human health and the environment.’

Actually, I prefer to leave out the word ‘excess’ in the last line.
I wonder if the lines will be approved.